After this first semester of English, I feel as though I have mastered imagery very well and how it affects the structure and content.
Here is a sample of me using imagery about the beach in Florida:
Walking on the warm sandy shores, listening to the the rushing of the cool waves, my feet sinking slowly with every step. The moist salty air, slowly caressing my face and hair as I proceed towards the water. As I walk towards the shore the water seems to slowly kiss the tips of my toes...
In that paragraph you can see that imagery of the sand and air of the beach. The audience is anyone who walks on the beach of anyone who has ever been to a beach. My purpose was to show and not tell how the sand and water feel on my feet and what's around the beach.
Hey Michael, after reading your blog I am amazed by your use of imagery. I think you are very good at using imagery in your writing. You used a lot of descriptive words and sentences to make the reader feel as if he or she were actually on the beach. One of your best imagery sentences was "...listening to the rushing of the cool waves." I think this is a great sentence because everyone that has been to a beach before can relate to this feeling. I think it puts the reader back on the beach and brings back fond memories. Very nice tho
ReplyDeleteHey Michael, I am commenting on your blog. This blog does show very good imagery. By using very well imagery you make the reader feel like they are at the beach. Your first sentence really puts you into your situation. By saying "the moist salty air, slowly caressing my face and hair as I proceed towards the water" shows really good description. I also agree with your purpose on showing the beach not telling about it. Your audience could also be anybody who has not been to the beach. It could show people who have not been to the beach what it is like to be on the beach and what it is like to feel the ocean and the moist air.
ReplyDeleteAfter reading this blog, I strongly agree that you have mastered imagery. Reading through I notice that you cover everything that a person would experience having a positive experience at the beach. You definitely show and not just tell by using a lot of sensory details as well. Not to mention you describe these things in a different way that clearly demonstrates your ability to utilize sensory details along with complex and intellectual word choice. Also by giving the water human characteristics, you describe the water by “kissing” your toes and that paints an image in the readers mind of what it feels like and what it’s compared to through your experience. By using this kind of imagery, you really make the experience at the beach very appealing to everybody.
ReplyDeleteHey Michael, you did a great job of using imagery in the sample paragraph that you showed us. I can fell the sand getting in my sandals as I walk down the shoreline. I can hear the crashing waves that are on the shoreline. One aspect of imagery that most people forget is the touching aspect of it. When you wrote, "The moist salty air, slowly caressing my face and hair as I proceed towards the water," that really enhanced the felling aspect of imagery which is what a lot of imagery users forget. I just wish the sample pararaph would have been longer so I could have seen more use of the imagery. But, in the breif showing of this imagery you did a great job of using it affectively.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the way your piece featured so much sensory detail, as a reader it really took me to that place and allowed me to live that moment. When you wrote, "the water seems to slowly kiss the tips of my toes," I could almost feel the water rushing in a creeping up on my feet. By organizing your piece this way and showing, not telling, you gave me a much greater appreciation of that experience. The opening was really superb and let me almost feel the sand between my toes when you said, "Walking on the warm sandy shores, listening to the rushing of the cool waves, my feet sinking slowly with every step." Because yours turned out so well, you've really inspired me to use sensory detail in my future writings.
ReplyDeleteMichael, your use of sensory detail and imagery in the paragraph above is a perfect example of those two techniques. I honestly felt like I was the one experiencing the sand and the air of the beach when I read this piece. By saying “Walking on the warm sandy shores, listening to the rushing of the cool waves,” you really force the reader/audience to picture the beach. I completely agree with your purpose of showing not telling and I think you did a very good job achieving your purpose. When you said "the water seems to slowly kiss the tips of my toes," I got the sensation of water on my feet and I could picture toes in the sand and water.
ReplyDeleteOut of all the blogs I have read, this one uses the best sensory details. “Walking on the warm sandy shores.” I can literately feel the warm sand between my toes, which was a great example of not only imagery, but sensory detail because I can feel not only see. “Listening to the rushing of the cool waves” this also gives me another sense, not only can I see the waves, I can also hear them crashing into the banks. “The moist salty air, slowly caressing my face and hair as I proceed towards the water” also was excited my senses as I could almost feel the humid air from the ocean hitting me in the face.
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